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Dear Dr Wilson,

Thank you for your patience while we considered your revised manuscript "Primate origins of human event cognition" for consideration as a Discovery Report at PLOS Biology. Your revised study has now been evaluated by the PLOS Biology editors, the Academic Editor and two of the original reviewers. Please allow me first of all to apologize for the long delay in sending our decision. Unfortunately, the previous academic editor was no longer available to handle your manuscript and it has taken some time until I was able to find a new academic editor.

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REVIEWS:

Reviewer #1: I think the revised manuscript is more clearly written. I also appreciated their justification and further explanation of their statistical analyses. I still felt like the paper would benefit from some more straightforward analyses to give the reader a better intuition and more confidence in the results.

I understand now that the Dirichlet model provides a measure of time looking at each AOI. I still think the percent of time looking at each AOI (calculated simply as the time at AOI/total time) without the full model would be informative. I don't insist the authors add this to the paper if the results look similar to the existing analyses, but I would be curious to see the results and this seems very simple to calculate.

I also still think that comparing heatmaps across species is important. I think the authors misunderstood my initial request - I would like to see a single heatmap per video (not time point) to quantify overall looking similarity. This would lose temporal resolution, but I believe would be a nice complement to the current time series analyses.

I thought the videos on OSF were somewhat confusing. In many cases, there seemed to be some panels that were not clearly labeled. E.g., video inanimate_human_compilation the bottom, left panel seems to be the infant looking behavior, but it is unclear what the other panels are.

Further, it seems from most of these example videos that babies are indeed looking at agents in the videos, perhaps it was just these examples, but this underscores my desire to see the above heatmap or AOI analyses.

I appreciated the authors efforts to make the data publicly accessible, but the need to install third party software was a barrier to me exploring the data.

Pg 3, line 205, reference 25 (Farris 2022) seems to be incorrectly summarized, as the main finding is neural sensitivity to observed social interactions.

Line 754 there is a typo : Trail > Trial

Reviewer #2: I appreciate the efforts that the authors have made in the revision process. Overall, the manuscript is now much clearer, and much more appropriate for publication, though I still have a few more minor recommendations:

There are a few places where the authors could still temper the language slightly, given that the referenced touchscreen data that bolster the agent-patient decomposition claim are not part of this manuscript:

-In line 40 (abstract), personally I feel that it would be more appropriate to say "These findings raise the possibility that event role tracking, a cognitive foundation of syntax, evolved long before language but requires time and experience to become ontogenetically available."

-Line 319 change 'indicating' to 'suggesting'

Given the graph produced in response to reviewer 2's concerns, I think it would be appropriate for the authors to mention that agent-patient size differences could be a strong driver of the agent bias found only in the food scenes.

I also agree with reviewer 1 that additional analyses on the infant data, restricted to trials in which infants were watching human videos only, would be informative. It would help clarify whether infants show a general lack of 'agent-patient viewing patterns' to complex/dynamic scenes or whether these patterns are manifest when the stimuli are more familiar. That said, the presence or lack thereof of this additional analysis does not disrupt the authors' primary findings or claims about similarities between humans and nonhuman apes.

Dear Dr Wilson,

Thank you for your patience while we considered your revised manuscript "Primate origins of human event cognition" for publication as a Discovery Report at PLOS Biology. This revised version of your manuscript has been evaluated by the PLOS Biology editors and the Academic Editor.

Based on our Academic Editor's assessment of your revision, we are likely to accept this manuscript for publication, provided you satisfactorily address the remaining points raised by the Academic Editor. Please also make sure to address the following data and other policy-related requests:

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Academic Editor remarks:

1. It does not seem like the two new supplemental figures are referenced in the main text.

2. Line 104: "neural distinction" --> "neural selectivity"

Dear Dr Wilson,

Thank you for the submission of your revised Discovery Report "Humans and great apes visually track event roles in similar ways" for publication in PLOS Biology. On behalf of my colleagues and the Academic Editor, Leyla Isik, I am pleased to say that we can in principle accept your manuscript for publication, provided you address any remaining formatting and reporting issues. These will be detailed in an email you should receive within 2-3 business days from our colleagues in the journal operations team; no action is required from you until then. Please note that we will not be able to formally accept your manuscript and schedule it for publication until you have completed any requested changes.

When you attend to the requests to come, please also address two final comments from the Academic Editor:

1. Supplemental figures 7, 8 and 9 need also to be referenced in the main text.

2. Line 104: "neural distinction" --> "neural selectivity"

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Sincerely, 

Christian

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