PONE-D-24-14986Exploring lifestyles, work environment and health care experience of Nepalese returnee labour migrants diagnosed with kidney-related problemsPLOS ONE

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Reviewer #1: This paper focuses on an interesting return migration health issue. It is overall well written and clear. However, there are quite a few aspects that require revision. I have listed my comments below:

In introduction, it would be worthwhile providing more detail on CKD (defining the health issue, its causes and symptoms, and prevalence in Nepal and destination countries). It would also be good to know more about what policies exist in Nepal on pre-departure and on-arrival orientation programmes.

page 3, line 8. Reference missing.

p.3 lines 13-17 Are these findings from studies taking place in destination countries, or also from source countries? This is unclear with the list of references provided.

p.4, last paragraph of introduction. The link between the knowledge gap this study aims to fill doesnt seem to correlate with the rationale provided in the sentences that precede - which refer more to the lack of diseases surveillance data to know more about prevalence of CKD. However, this study looks more at understanding what risk factors migrants are exposed to when abroad. The study rationale needs to be further clarified.

p4. typo: there is an "s" missing for "interview".

p4. Eligibility criteria: What about asking participants how many years they had been back to Nepal? This seems like key data that is not discussed in this paper.

Figure 1 and table 1 are good illustrations of the sample. However these should be under the findings section, as they present information on the final sample.

In methods, there is no statement as to why women where not included in this study. It is mentioned that women represent only 15% of labour out migration, but it would be important for authors to state more clearly why they decided to not include women in this study.

p.7. Coding of data: How was this done? Was a software used? There is no mention in text, but in supplementary file you mention it was "analysed manually". What does this mean? This information should be in the main manuscript.

Also, how was the analysis done? Thematic analysis is mentioned, but then not elaborated on. This is a very specific analysis method that is often misunderstood. Therefore it is important to describe how it was used.

p.8 It seems the key themes from the thematic analysis are the interview guide headings. This is a decision for the authors, but it does seem there may have been a lack of analysis of the data, and a result that is quite descriptive.

In general throughout the findings, I found the data to be presented in a very descriptive form. Often, I wanted to know more about a statement. For example, why were migrants drinking soft drinks? What did they think of the shared rooms/dorms? Why did they not eat more fruit? Why did they think medications did not suit their body? I am not sure if these questions were not asked in the interviews, or whether its an issue in the analysis stage.

P.9. The first few quotes are very similar and some say the same thing. The second quote doesn't seem to represent the sentence written by the authors.

p.13. Clarify whether the Barber had a medical assessment to conclude his work environment was the cause of his health issues, or whether it was his own perspective? This seems unclear at the moment.

In general, did you ask interviewees about other concurrent health issues? It seems that would have been interesting to factor in, to provide more context to their health.

p.18, first paragraph, lines 3-5. This sentence is unclear. 2nd paragraph: unclear as to why the findings are surprising? This needs more explanation.

In discussion there is generally a lack of literature.

p.19, paragraph 3. "sent back at their own expense". This seems to contradict what is in the findings section - where it states that the company paid for their return to Nepal.

p.19, reference 31. This reference seems to be about Qatar and not other countries. This should be further clarified in text.

p.20, paragraph 1, lines 2-5: I don't think this data was in the findings section.

p.20 Limitation section: This is the first time the district is mentioned by name. This is missing in introduction/methods.

COREQ supplementary file: it seems some of the stated content in this list is not reflected in the paper: item 5, 9, 17, 22 (data saturation), 23, 27.

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PONE-D-24-14986R1Exploring lifestyles, work environment and health care experience of Nepalese returnee labour migrants diagnosed with kidney-related problemsPLOS ONE

Dear Dr. Regmi,

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Reviewer #1: Thank you for the responses to my comments. The revisions have improved the paper.

I have two remaining comments from the first review round:

Comment 8: Description of gender of sample. Thank you for adding a comment on women's participation in the study in the limitations section. However, I notice there is no mention of gender of participants on page 6 (either in text or table). It would be important to note gender of sample.

Comment 20: I did not see a response to my comment on the COREQ supplementary file. My original question was: COREQ supplementary file: it seems some of the stated content in this

list is not reflected in the paper: item 5, 9, 17, 22 (data saturation), 23, 27. Please clarify.

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Exploring lifestyles, work environment and health care experience of Nepalese returnee labour migrants diagnosed with kidney-related problems

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Reviewer #2: I am happy with the revised version of the paper. I like the research question, the structure of the paper, the quality of writing, and the way the authors describe their empirical proceeding and results. Most importantly, the authors have addressed all the issues stated in my referee report for the first version appropriately.

Reviewer #3: An insightful and intriguing article that raises a serious concern: the poor migrant labour population is subjected to conditions that predispose them to devastating kidney illnesses. It is distressing that exploitation continues to occur in places where South Asians work, such as Qatar and Malaysia. To go deeper into this topic, I recommend that the authors perform follow-up research with social workers, social policy advocates, public health professionals, and human rights activists (both local and international). It is critical to employ welfare professionals to conduct a full assessment of this sector.

While pre-immigration concerns are crucial, importing countries must also be accountable for the well-being of its workforce. Many of these people live abroad in relative safety- bubbles for a while, frequently remitting monies to their family, only to return to their native nations as patients. Addressing such complicated issues necessitates a multidisciplinary approach to ensure a dignified future for all individuals concerned.

I support the publication of this article.

Prof Venkat Rao Pulla - Brisbane, Australia

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Reviewer #3: Yes: Prof Venkat Rao Pulla, Adjunct Associate Professor, Department of Social Work, James cook University, Australia

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