Peer Review History

Original SubmissionApril 7, 2024
Decision Letter - Adetayo Olorunlana, Editor

PONE-D-24-13949

Impact of pole dancing on mental wellbeing and sexual self-concept: protocol for a systematic review and meta-analysis

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Reviewers' comments:

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Comments to the Author

1. Does the manuscript provide a valid rationale for the proposed study, with clearly identified and justified research questions?

The research question outlined is expected to address a valid academic problem or topic and contribute to the base of knowledge in the field.

Reviewer #1: Yes

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2. Is the protocol technically sound and planned in a manner that will lead to a meaningful outcome and allow testing the stated hypotheses?

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Reviewer #1: Yes

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3. Is the methodology feasible and described in sufficient detail to allow the work to be replicable?

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Reviewer #1: Yes

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Reviewer #1: Yes

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Reviewer #1: Yes

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6. Review Comments to the Author

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Reviewer #1: The authors present a well-written systematic review protocol, with the aim of evaluating the effect of pole dancing on mental well-being and sexual self-concept. A relevant topic, with no published systematic reviews and with the potential to provide good evidence for decision-making.

However, I suggest minor revisions so that the manuscript is even better for readers.

The introduction is long and tiring. The suggestion for the authors is to summarize the content featuring the main theme, pole dancing, followed by text with the most up-to-date references of studies that show potential psychological benefits, maintaining the important gap of there being no systematic reviews specifically on pole dancing and concluding the introduction with the main objective.

Finally, the methodology is well constructed, but the text "Our primary outcomes of interest are the degrees of mental well-being and the enhancement or alteration of the sexual self-concept.", does not provide the specificity required in a SR and should be divided. Authors should consider the degrees of mental well-being as a primary outcome, citing validated scales that need to have been used in RCTs to be included in the SR (Ex: The Warwick-Edinburgh Mental Well-being Scale (WEMWBS), Ryff Psychological Well -being (PWBS-42) scale). In this way, they would consider enhancement and alteration of the sexual self-concept as secondary outcomes, also including validated scales that should be present in RCTs, such as The Multidimensional Sexual Self-Concept Questionnaire (MSSCQ).

The inclusion in the methodology of the PICOS strategy (P= Adults, I= pole dancing, C= usual activity, or other type of physical activity/dance, O= mental well-being, sexual self-concept assessed by the scales, S= RCT) will further enrich this section.

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Reviewer #1: Yes: Ricardo Ney Cobucci

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Revision 1

Dear Reviewer #1:

Thank you very much for your careful review! We have carefully studied your valuable comments and have made amendments one by one. We hope that these adjustments will meet your requirements!

1.“The introduction is long and tiring. The suggestion for the authors is to summarize the content featuring the main theme, pole dancing, followed by text with the most up-to-date references of studies that show potential psychological benefits, maintaining the important gap of there being no systematic reviews specifically on pole dancing and concluding the introduction with the main objective.”

We have streamlined the introduction. We cut out a paragraph. The paragraph reads as follows:

“Additionally, dance is critical in augmenting bodily awareness, fostering mental health, and facilitating neurorehabilitation(7). The release of endorphins triggered by dance activities has been linked to significant improvements in mental well-being(8). In essence, dance offers a holistic therapeutic avenue for enhancing mental health, embodying various psychological benefits such as improved self-esteem, stress mitigation, emotional health, and heightened bodily consciousness. This extensive body of research underscores dance's therapeutic potential in advancing mental health and supporting psychological well-being across various populations. ”

In addition, we have removed the following from the introduction:

“The multifaceted nature of dance, characterized by its rhythm, musicality, social engagement, technical and physical demands, and capacity to facilitate connection, mindfulness, and the expression of aesthetic emotions, contributes to its overall health and well-being benefits.(9)”

“The intersectionality of pole dancing with feminist theory further highlights its role in dialogues concerning gender, sexuality, and empowerment(13). ”

2.Finally, the methodology is well constructed, but the text "Our primary outcomes of interest are the degrees of mental well-being and the enhancement or alteration of the sexual self-concept.", does not provide the specificity required in a SR and should be divided. Authors should consider the degrees of mental well-being as a primary outcome, citing validated scales that need to have been used in RCTs to be included in the SR (Ex: The Warwick-Edinburgh Mental Well-being Scale (WEMWBS), Ryff Psychological Well -being (PWBS-42) scale). In this way, they would consider enhancement and alteration of the sexual self-concept as secondary outcomes, also including validated scales that should be present in RCTs, such as The Multidimensional Sexual Self-Concept Questionnaire (MSSCQ).

We adjusted part of the article and identified mental wellbeing and sexual self-concept as the primary outcome and secondary outcome respectively. Finally, we have included in the article specific scales used in the measurement process. For details, please see lines 134-140.

3.The inclusion in the methodology of the PICOS strategy (P = Adults, I = pole dancing, C = usual activity, or other type of physical activity/dance, O = mental well-being, sexual self-concept assessed by the scales, S = RCT) will further enrich this section.

We have adopted the "PICOS" principle to present the inclusion criteria according to your suggestion.For details, please see lines 126-143.

Thank you again for your valuable advice. We have further refined our protocol and made the upcoming studies more standardized.

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Decision Letter - Adetayo Olorunlana, Editor

Impact of pole dancing on mental wellbeing and sexual self-concept: protocol for a systematic review and meta-analysis

PONE-D-24-13949R1

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Adetayo Olorunlana, Ph.D.

Academic Editor

PLOS ONE

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Reviewers' comments:

Reviewer's Responses to Questions

Comments to the Author

1. Does the manuscript provide a valid rationale for the proposed study, with clearly identified and justified research questions?

The research question outlined is expected to address a valid academic problem or topic and contribute to the base of knowledge in the field.

Reviewer #1: Yes

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2. Is the protocol technically sound and planned in a manner that will lead to a meaningful outcome and allow testing the stated hypotheses?

The manuscript should describe the methods in sufficient detail to prevent undisclosed flexibility in the experimental procedure or analysis pipeline, including sufficient outcome-neutral conditions (e.g. necessary controls, absence of floor or ceiling effects) to test the proposed hypotheses and a statistical power analysis where applicable. As there may be aspects of the methodology and analysis which can only be refined once the work is undertaken, authors should outline potential assumptions and explicitly describe what aspects of the proposed analyses, if any, are exploratory.

Reviewer #1: Yes

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3. Is the methodology feasible and described in sufficient detail to allow the work to be replicable?

Descriptions of methods and materials in the protocol should be reported in sufficient detail for another researcher to reproduce all experiments and analyses. The protocol should describe the appropriate controls, sample size calculations, and replication needed to ensure that the data are robust and reproducible.

Reviewer #1: Yes

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4. Have the authors described where all data underlying the findings will be made available when the study is complete?

The PLOS Data policy requires authors to make all data underlying the findings described in their manuscript fully available without restriction, with rare exception, at the time of publication. The data should be provided as part of the manuscript or its supporting information, or deposited to a public repository. For example, in addition to summary statistics, the data points behind means, medians and variance measures should be available. If there are restrictions on publicly sharing data—e.g. participant privacy or use of data from a third party—those must be specified.

Reviewer #1: Yes

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5. Is the manuscript presented in an intelligible fashion and written in standard English?

PLOS ONE does not copyedit accepted manuscripts, so the language in submitted articles must be clear, correct, and unambiguous. Any typographical or grammatical errors should be corrected at revision, so please note any specific errors here.

Reviewer #1: Yes

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6. Review Comments to the Author

Please use the space provided to explain your answers to the questions above and, if applicable, provide comments about issues authors must address before this protocol can be accepted for publication. You may also include additional comments for the author, including concerns about research or publication ethics.

You may also provide optional suggestions and comments to authors that they might find helpful in planning their study.

(Please upload your review as an attachment if it exceeds 20,000 characters)

Reviewer #1: The authors responded to the reviewers' suggestions and the manuscript is ready to be published. Congratulations!

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Reviewer #1: Yes: Ricardo Ney Cobucci

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Formally Accepted
Acceptance Letter - Adetayo Olorunlana, Editor

PONE-D-24-13949R1

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