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PONE-D-21-06290 Waiting for the Better Reward: Comparison of Delay of Gratification in Young Children across Two Cultures PLOS ONE Dear Dr. Miller (Harrison), Thank you for submitting your manuscript to PLOS ONE. After careful consideration, we feel that it has merit but does not fully meet PLOS ONE’s publication criteria as it currently stands. Therefore, we invite you to submit a revised version of the manuscript that addresses all the points raised by both reviewers during the review process. I feel that both reviewers’ comments were particularly constructive and useful to further strengthen the manuscript. I particularly agree with Reviewer 1 about the need to further analyze the comparison between Italian and Chinese participants after removing the outliers and with Reviewer 2 on the need to write a more concise Discussion. I also have some additional comments. Across the manuscript, there are some inconsistencies in the use of the terms delay of gratification and delay choice. As also suggested by Reviewer 1, the paper by Beran (2005) Frontiers in Psychology is an excellent resource to clarify the definitions employed. Along with the literature on the stronger role of quality rather than quantity on delay of gratification, please also see: “Addessi, E., & Rossi, S. (2011). Tokens improve capuchin performance in the reverse–reward contingency task. Proceedings of the Royal Society B: Biological Sciences, 278(1707), 849-854.” Please see some furher, minor comments below: Introduction, p. 1, second paragraph: not clear what a “standard choice paradigm” is Introduction, p. 2, second paragraph: not clear why the social perspective is mentioned here, since it is not a topic of the manuscript Introduction, p. 3, second paragraph: “her colleagues” Methods, p. 4, second paragraph: “had to wait” Discussion, p. 4, second paragraph: “experience” rather than “experiment”? Please submit your revised manuscript by May 27 2021 11:59PM. If you will need more time than this to complete your revisions, please reply to this message or contact the journal office at plosone@plos.org. When you're ready to submit your revision, log on to https://www.editorialmanager.com/pone/ and select the 'Submissions Needing Revision' folder to locate your manuscript file. Please include the following items when submitting your revised manuscript:
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The manuscript must describe a technically sound piece of scientific research with data that supports the conclusions. Experiments must have been conducted rigorously, with appropriate controls, replication, and sample sizes. The conclusions must be drawn appropriately based on the data presented. Reviewer #1: Yes Reviewer #2: Partly ********** 2. Has the statistical analysis been performed appropriately and rigorously? Reviewer #1: Yes Reviewer #2: No ********** 3. Have the authors made all data underlying the findings in their manuscript fully available? The PLOS Data policy requires authors to make all data underlying the findings described in their manuscript fully available without restriction, with rare exception (please refer to the Data Availability Statement in the manuscript PDF file). The data should be provided as part of the manuscript or its supporting information, or deposited to a public repository. 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(Please upload your review as an attachment if it exceeds 20,000 characters) Reviewer #1: In the current study (“Waiting for the Better Reward: Comparison of Delay of Gratification in Young Children across Two Cultures”), the authors expanded the research on self-control and delay of gratification with preschoolers to include a more diverse sample of children, including British and Chinese participants. The link with culturally-dependent parenting is very interesting and I appreciate the authors’ efforts in expanding this research. The paper is well-written and should appeal to a broad audience. Because of this (readership by a broad audience), it would be beneficial to expand on some areas of research discussed in the Intro (specific recommendations are listed below). The research design was straight forward overall, but there are a few outstanding questions concerning inclusion of participants, the inhibition tasks, as well as the final delay of gratification task. It was not clear why Chinese participants were included in the inhibition tasks but not the British. Furthermore, there is a distinct and important difference between self-control tasks (e.g., delay of gratification) and inhibitory tasks (e.g., motor inhibition, Stroop, etc.) – this distinction should be made by the authors as they discuss the correlations between tasks of inhibition and self-control. • Beran, M. J. (2015). The comparative science of "self-control": What are we talking about? Frontiers in Psychology, 6, Article 51 Can the authors provide a rationale for why they chose the specific inhibitory tasks (Knock Tap, Day Night, Grass Snow) and what the tasks add to the story on developmental self-control? Also, why were these tasks selected (i.e., are they used often in the developmental literature and are they sensitive to age-related changes in inhibition?) The final dichotomous delay choice task as used (1 sticker now vs. 4 stickers later) has revealed challenging for comparative testing (see papers listed below). The main issue is that a choice for the larger, later option (4 stickers) is synonymous with a prepotent response to select the larger of two rewards. Research with capuchin monkeys has shown that many individuals fail to wait the full amount of time when they are then required to accumulate the chosen rewards (delay maintenance). Thus, the children may have chosen the delayed larger option, which appears like a delayed tolerance of 20 minutes (or the length of the study), but this choice may not accurately reflect children’s self-control or tolerance for such a long delay. The authors also do not include data on children’s performance in the delay choice task except for correlations with the inhibitory tasks (e.g., what proportion of children chose the LL reward? how did performance measure across the 9 trials for participants, etc.?) • Addessi, E., Paglieri, F., Beran, M. J., Evans, T. A., Macchitella, L., De Petrillo, F., & Focaroli, V.2013). Delay choice versus delay maintenance: Different measures of delayed gratification in capuchin monkeys (Cebus apella). Journal of Comparative Psychology, 127, 392 • Paglieri, F., Focaroli, V., Bramlett, J., Tierno, V., McIntyre, J. M., Addessi, E., ... & Beran, M. J. (2013). The hybrid delay task: Can capuchin monkeys (Cebus apella) sustain a delay after an initial choice to do so?. Behavioural Processes, 94, 45-54. The authors often reference the rotating tray task as a ‘novel task’ throughout the manuscript, particularly in the Discussion. For example, “novel rotating tray paradigm”, “With a novel delay choice task, we found a…”. The use of ‘novel’ is a bit misleading - please be sure to cite the original work that developed this paradigm, including the original Bramlett paper and follow-ups (see below). Also, the follow ups listed below vary reward visibility for the primates and present the task to new monkeys to test the role of experience in self-control performance – please link the current findings on children with monkeys, particularly as it relates to reward visibility (Perdue et al.) • Beran, M. J., Perdue, B. M., Rossettie, M. S., James, B. T., Whitham, W., Walker, B., Futch, S. E., & Parrish, A. E. (2016). Self-control assessments of capuchin monkeys with the rotating tray task and the accumulation task. Behavioural Processes, 129, 68-79. • Perdue, B. M., Bramlett, J. L., Evans, T. A., & Beran, M. J. (2015). Waiting for what comes later: capuchin monkeys show self-control even for nonvisible delayed rewards. Animal cognition, 18(5), 1105-1112. A lingering question concerns the three outliers in Experiment 2 – as noted by the authors in the Results and Discussion, these three outliers influenced the results of the 4-year-old British group. If the three children that scored zero in test trials for Experiment 2 are removed, does the finding still hold for the country difference? The authors removed these 3 participants to compare 3, 4, and 5-year-olds for the British participants but I am curious if these 3 participants are removed from the group analysis, does the finding still hold that Chinese 4 and 5-year-olds outperform British 4 and 5-year-olds? Please include this information in the Results and if removal of these outliers yields equivalent performance across Chinese and British participants, this should be considered in the Discussion. This seems to be particularly relevant to resolve given that the premise of a country-level (British vs. Chinese) difference potentially lies on these three outliers. The authors argue that Chinese children show greater cognitive flexibility and working memory than the British based on the result that 4 and 5 year old Chinese children outperform 4 and 5 year old British children – if the removal of these three outliers causes this effect to go away, I would suggest that these conclusions be revisited. More broadly, capuchin monkeys perform quite well in this task over many different manipulations (including the Perdue et al 15 study with nonvisible rewards in the rotating tray) and also show flexibility in responding (they also do not preserve their former choice but perform well even for non-visible rewards and when placed in different locations), and so I wonder if the authors would consider the monkeys’ working memory and cognitive flexibility to be on par with the children? Please incorporate some discussion of the comparison of capuchin monkey and children performance across the different tasks/conditions using the rotating tray and what the similarity in responding across species may indicate. I also provide comments below for each section as well a Minor Comments at the end. Introduction: Second Paragraph (“Parallel to…”) - Can the authors expand some on what we know about children’s performance in the delay maintenance and delay choice tasks? What types of rewards (primary or secondary) are typically used for children in these studies, what delay lengths (e.g., seconds or minutes, etc.) are typically shown by 3-year-olds vs. 4-year-olds (is there a large difference in tolerance for delay across this age-span? How do preschoolers compare in these tasks to older children?) Fourth Paragraph (“Theoretically…”) – Can the authors expand on the references 25-26 (i.e., were inhibitory control and delay of gratification measured in these tasks, how, please expand?). Can the authors give more detail for Reference 30 (i.e., what type of intervention was used? how long were the benefits of training seen? etc.). Research with nonhuman primates (and pigs) reveals a similar effect of quality > quantity as described for avian species – I would recommend including the following articles when referencing comparative work on these variables in the Introduction & Discussion: • Anderson, J. R., Hattori, Y., & Fujita, K. (2008). Quality before quantity: Rapid learning of reverse-reward contingency by capuchin monkeys (Cebus apella). Journal of Comparative Psychology, 122(4), 445–448. • Beran, M. J., & Evans, T. A. (2006). Maintenance of delay of gratification by four chimpanzees (Pan troglodytes): The effects of delayed reward visibility, experimenter presence, and extended delay intervals. Behavioural processes, 73(3), 315-324. • Glady, Y., Genty, É., & Roeder, J. J. (2012). Brown Lemurs (Eulemur fulvus) can master the qualitative version of the reverse-reward contingency. Plos one, 7(10), e48378. • Zebunke, M., Kreiser, M., Melzer, N., Langbein, J., & Puppe, B. (2018). Better, not just more—contrast in qualitative aspects of reward facilitates impulse control in pigs. Frontiers in psychology, 9, 2099. Methods/Results: Day-Night and Grass-Snow tasks – was response time measured in addition to accuracy? RT data is considered more sensitive than accuracy data and thus more informative regarding inhibition ‘failures’ for standard Stroop tasks with adults. Table 1 can be removed and incorporated into the text – the average age of all participants for each country is sufficient (with standard deviation) versus the average for each year Testing Q – were children immediately given their selected reward to keep? Include this in the Testing description. Figure 2 caption needs more information. Perhaps label the boxes as 1 and 2 and provide some information about the symbols in the caption. Because there was an age effect in Experiment 1, it may be helpful to show this in Figure 3 as the authors depicted in Figure 4. Right now, Figure 3 focuses on the country difference (which was a null finding) and is collapsed across age (which is the significant effect). See above for question regarding removal of the three outliers for the British vs. Chinese age comparison. Results were missing for the final Delay of Gratification task (smaller, sooner vs. larger, later) – what proportion of children chose the LL reward? how did performance measure across the 9 trials for participants, etc.? Discussion In the first paragraph, be sure to specify that British children were not presented with the other inhibition tasks as it currently reads as if this effect was only found for Chinese children. When presenting the rotating tray task as “novel” throughout the Discussion, the authors should cite the original work using this paradigm as this task. For example, instead of “With a novel delay choice task, we found a…” -- “Using a test designed for comparative assessments of self-control in primates (Bramlett et al.), we found a…” The authors focus heavily on potential differences in working memory and cognitive flexibility of Chinese vs. British, but see above for question regarding three outliers. Also, include some discussion of capuchin monkey vs. children performance as it pertains to cognitive flexibility and working memory (including the Perdue et al 15 study with capuchins and nonvisible rewards). In the last sentence, include information on age-related changes as well as this is a critical and replicated result. Minor Comments: Introduction: It is odd to switch from “we” to “they” in the 2nd sentence of the Introduction Change “on” to “in” for this sentence “in the face of” is the common wording for this phrase – “The measure of interest is the length of time lapsed as children need to maintain their action IN the face of…” Change from “posting to “posing” in the following sentence - “Furthermore, the role of reward representation has not been examined in East Asian cultures, POSING important questions…” Change “varying” to “varied” – “we expected to see similar patterns to those in Miller et al. (42) and Garon et al. (37) where children performed better when reward VARIED in quality…” Methods/Results: Remove the word “with” – “In Britain, we recruited and tested 61 children at schools in Cambridgeshire and Buckinghamshire, which served predominantly white…” Change the word “to” to “in” – “The Chinese data was collected specifically for the present study and this data set has not been used IN any other publications to date.” Change “experimenter” to plural – “all EXPERIMENTERS followed a prepared...” Change “than” to “then” – “half of children received the quantity condition THEN the quality condition…” Change “significant” to “significantly” –“Moreover, 4-year-olds scored SIGNIFICANTLY higher on the Knock-Tap, Day-Night and Grass-Snow task than children aged 3-years-old (all p <. 02).” Change “task” to “tasks” – “Additionally, we found that children’s performance in the quantity condition in Experiment 1 in the rotating tray paradigm was significantly correlated with performance in the standard delay of gratification task, both TASKS involving choices...” Discussion: Change “chimpanzee” to plural – “We note that our findings are consistent with contemporary research on non-human animals, which suggests that corvids, parrots and CHIMPANZEES are able…” Change “tend’ to “trend” – “This proposal may also explain why we only found non-significant TREND effect of country in...” Change “emphasis” to “emphasize” – “We do EMPHASIZE again, however, that both groups performed well overall.” Change “Out” to “Our” – “OUR study not only add depth to the growing body of cross-cultural research on self-control…” Reviewer #2: The authors report an experiment on Chinese preschooler’s delay of gratification, using a novel apparatus/procedure that had previously been used in comparative studies. They also included a series of inhibitory control measures and manipulated reward visibility and quantity/quality. Data were compared with data from British preschoolers from a previous study. The studies were well conducted, the manuscript is detailed and well-structured, and the findings are interesting. I have some comments and suggestions for the authors: (1) Introduction: The introduction gives a good overview of the state of the field and motivates the purpose of the study well. (1a) However, it took me until the methods section to realize that only the Chinese data were novel data and that the British data were based on data from a previous study. This also explained my puzzlement about the fact that additional inhibitory control measures were collected for the Chinese sample, but not for the British sample. I think the authors could centre their introduction more on the novel Chinese data they collected and explicitly state that British data from a previous study was used for comparison. I think it would also be helpful to clarify this point in the abstract (i.e., distinguish between novel and previously collected data). (1b) There were some instances where expressions were non-idiomatic or sounded somewhat awkward (“..need to maintain their action on the face of a tempting treat…”, “children of 4 years-old and above”, “..Chinese show advantageous performance on self-control tasks than their..”, etc.). There were further instances throughout the manuscript, and I think the manuscript would benefit from careful proof-reading and language editing. (2) Methods: The methods are clearly described. (2a) Participants: Further details on Chinese participants/data collection would be helpful. For example, when was the Chinese data collected? How many Chinese children per age group were tested for the study (currently, only numbers for British and Chinese children together are provided)? (2b) The authors describe their counterbalancing within Experiments; was the order of Experiments also counterbalanced or did they take place in a fixed order? (2c) Delay of gratification task: The authors stated that the delayed reward remained inaccessible until the end of the study. How long was the delay and was the delay standardized across children (or did it vary)? (2d) Interrater reliability: usually Cohen’s Kappa or interrater-reliability coefficients (ICC) are reported as measures of reliability and not just percentage agreement. It would be helpful to add one of these standard measures. (3) Analyses: Using GLMMs to analyse the data is an adequate choice and full-null model comparisons are helpful to ensure the variables of interest predict outcome measures. (3a) It would be good if the authors could add further details on their analytical approach: for example, which control variables did the null models contain? What function did they use for likelihood ratio tests to determine p-values of model predictors? For transparency, it would be helpful if the authors published their R code alongside their paper or, as a minimum, provide details on their model-formulas in the manuscript. (3b) Furthermore, the authors may consider comparing a full model (with interaction term) with a reduced model (only main effects) to find the model with the best fit to the data, and then report the best fit model and its results. (3c) What really puzzled me (and, in fact, seemed redundant) are the non-parametric follow-up tests. The GLMMs already provide all the relevant information (i.e., is there a significant effect of country, condition, age, etc.). There are also packages available in R for follow-up tests for predictors with more than 2 levels (e.g., the lsmeans package). Also, while age is entered as continuous variable in the models, it is then used as a categorical variable in the follow up tests. If the authors were interested in differences between age groups, they could have entered age as categorical variable in their GLMMs. (4) Results: (4a) The studies also included preference and control trials, but the data are currently not reported. I think it would be helpful to report these data in the results section. (4b) Table 2: it would be helpful to clarify that the p-values were derived from likelihood ratio tests. (4c) Please also see previous comments that it is not clear why non-parametric tests are reported. (5) The discussion elaborates on the findings in detail. It could have been more concisely written at times, but I leave it up to the authors whether they would want to edit the discussion section. Minor comment: 1st paragraph, introduction: “From financial decision in humans to foraging behaviours in other animals, we frequently face intertemporal choices in which they weigh the costs and and benefits…” This sentence sounds as if “we” are also “other animals” and switches somewhat awkwardly between “we” and “they”. Reword? For future submissions, it would be helpful if the manuscript file included page numbers, so they can be used as reference for comments. ********** 6. PLOS authors have the option to publish the peer review history of their article (what does this mean?). If published, this will include your full peer review and any attached files. If you choose “no”, your identity will remain anonymous but your review may still be made public. Do you want your identity to be public for this peer review? For information about this choice, including consent withdrawal, please see our Privacy Policy. 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PONE-D-21-06290R1 Waiting for the Better Reward: Comparison of Delay of Gratification in Young Children across Two Cultures PLOS ONE Dear Dr. Miller (Harrison), Thank you for submitting your manuscript to PLOS ONE. After careful consideration, we feel that it has merit but does not fully meet PLOS ONE’s publication criteria as it currently stands. Therefore, we invite you to submit a revised version of the manuscript that addresses the points raised during the review process. In particular, please carefully address the issues raised by Reviewer 2 concerning statistical analyses and report also in the abstract, introduction, results and discussion that the data on British children have already been collected for a previous study. Please submit your revised manuscript by Aug 25 2021 11:59PM. If you will need more time than this to complete your revisions, please reply to this message or contact the journal office at plosone@plos.org. When you're ready to submit your revision, log on to https://www.editorialmanager.com/pone/ and select the 'Submissions Needing Revision' folder to locate your manuscript file. Please include the following items when submitting your revised manuscript:
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PLOS ONE does not copyedit accepted manuscripts, so the language in submitted articles must be clear, correct, and unambiguous. Any typographical or grammatical errors should be corrected at revision, so please note any specific errors here. Reviewer #1: Yes Reviewer #2: Yes ********** 6. Review Comments to the Author Please use the space provided to explain your answers to the questions above. You may also include additional comments for the author, including concerns about dual publication, research ethics, or publication ethics. (Please upload your review as an attachment if it exceeds 20,000 characters) Reviewer #1: I appreciate the authors' responsiveness to the reviewer feedback and believe that they have adequately addressed the comments from the previous round for an improved and interesting manuscript. As a very minor comment, when referencing the studies (47-52), on lines 153-154 and 702-704, be sure to be inclusive of the pig reference (right now, the authors refer to these studies as primates and avian species but study 51 includes pigs). Reviewer #2: The authors have considerably revised their manuscript and I found the overall manuscript improved. The authors have addressed the majority of reviewer comments, however, there remain a few issues that I think would need to be addressed and/or clarified in a further revision. (1) Use of previously collected data: I commented in my initial review that the fact that the British data originates from a previously published study did not become clear until the methods section and recommended to centre the paper more on the novel Chinese data. The authors responded that the comparison of the two data sets is central to their paper and that they did not want to emphasize one group over the other. I have no objections to this point (it is up to the authors to decide on the emphasis of their paper); however, the authors still do not clearly state in the abstract or in the introduction that the only novel data are the Chinese data. In fact, statements in the abstract like “Here, we tested delay of gratification in 136 3 to 5-year-old British (n=61) and Chinese (n=75) children using Bramlett et al. (1) delay choice paradigm…” give the impression that all the presented data were novel. For transparency reasons, I think it is important to clearly state throughout the manuscript that the British data used for comparison has previously been published (and reference the respective publication). I think this needs to be stated (and the publication referenced) throughout including the abstract, introduction, figure captions, table headings and discussion section, so even readers how may skip sections of the paper are aware of this. (2) Statistical analyses: In my previous comments, I asked the authors for some clarifications about their statistical approach. They have now provided further details and helpfully provided examples from their Rscript (their data is also available for download from figshare). However, I have some remaining comments/questions about the analyses. (2a) P-values of main effects in the best fit model: Unfortunately, based on the Rscript provided it still did not fully become clear how the p-values were determined. It seems like the authors manually removed each factor of interest and then compared models, but the full script is not provided (only what seems like an example is provided). [Note: likelihood ratio tests for all factors can be quickly done with the drop1() function, using the best-fit model as input and setting the test statistic to chi-square; e.g. drop1(m4, test=”Chisq”).] On my second reading of the paper, I also noticed that the model tables (Table 1 and 2) report z-values for the estimates. If the reported p-values are derived from likelihood ratio tests, then the reported test statistic would need to be chi-square values and dfs from those tests. The z-values refer to approximate p-values from the model outputs and do not correspond to the likelihood ratio test statistic (which is a chi-square test statistic). (2b) Age as continuous vs. categorical variable in the GLMMs: The authors now clarified that age was entered as categorical variable in the GLMMs. However, the R-script does not convert age into a factor before analysis and age is a numerical variable in the data file. So based on this information, it seems that age may have been entered as a continuous variable? Could the authors double check and, if necessary, re-run their analyses with age as categorical variable? (2c) Additional non-parametric post-hoc tests: I commented in my previous review that I am puzzled about the non-parametric follow-up tests and the authors offered two reasons for conducting them (a) “to test the direction of these effects” and (b) “comparable analysis with our previous related study (Miller et al., 2019, Animal Cognition”. About (a): the model estimates (i.e., their sign) provide information about the direction of the effects; for example, the estimate of condition in experiment 1 is negative and assuming that quality was set as reference level, this reveals that children’s success rate was lower in the quantity as compared to the quality condition. For any factor with two levels (which are the majority of the authors’ factors), the initial model output is sufficient to interpret the direction of the effects. For factors with more than 2 levels (such as age), the authors could set the reference level of the factor to e.g. 3yos using the relevel() function and will then get estimates for 3 vs. 4 and 3 vs. 5; if they also want an estimate of 4 vs. 5 they can change the reference level to 4yos and re-run the model. About (b): I had a look at the methods and results section of the previous paper (Miller et al., 2019). The paper reports model comparisons and tables with model estimates and p-values (derived from, what I assume, are likelihood ratio tests). Non-parametric tests were only reported for comparisons against chance; no non-parametric test statistics for e.g. comparing the two conditions were reported. So, it seems that the authors directly interpreted the model estimates in their previous article (?) and only used non-parametric tests for comparisons against chance. (Note that my puzzlement only concerns the use of non-parametric effects to interpret the model effects, not their use for comparisons against chance.) (3) Discussion, p. 21, line 668 ff.: This paragraph makes some broad claims about country-level differences in performance although the data is more nuanced than that. In fact, the authors have a very insightful and nuanced discussion of cultural similarities and differences later in the discussion section and I think the later section does better justice to their data. So, I would recommend removing the paragraph in lines 668-678. Minor comment: The authors frequently use wording like "Bramlett et al. (1) delay choice paradigm" when referencing paradigms or previous findings. 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